Improving my recount writing

Walk to Glen Innes Centre

“Who wants to go to GI centre with me?” I asked.  I got many people to say “I’ll come.”  It was almost 3:00.  Just 5 more minutes until the bell.  “BRRRRIIINGGGGG!” goes the bell.  My friends and I got ready to go to the GI centre.

We crossed the road to take the long footpath down to the place we used to do cross country.  It was majestic because there were birds chirping and the wind moving the trees.  There was no bad things happening.  The path was a bit twisty but atleast I was safe.  

Close to the GI centre, we jumped over a small fence to get  there faster.  There were cars whizzing past us.  I also saw many chip packets on the ground where I walked.  It was sad people didn’t put their rubbish.  We all were talking about what we were going to do at GI centre.  

“Almost there guys.” I said.  There was a WOF by the gas station that I recognized because my older sister used to work there.  There also was the gas station that sold the best slushies I know of.  We then had to cross the road to get to the other path.  The cars stopped for us and we walked on.  There were many shops including pizza hut, one of my favourite shops.  

We walked up the path to the GI centre.  There were many cars to our left and a two dollar shop to our right.  When we were walking up the path, there were many delicious smells.  The smells made me get hungry so I bought some chicken and chips for us to eat.  We took a rest on one of the benches in the GI centre.  There were hair salons if anyone wanted a haircut and some other shops we could buy things.

All Around The Rugby World Cup Recount

                                          All Around The Rugby World Cup Recount

WALT: write a recount on our topic study.

All around the Rugby World Cup was our topic study.  We started this topic in week 1 term 3.  All around the RWC was about the countries that are participating in the RWC.  We had to learn about the country's going to the RWC and what pools they are in.  

In the RWC, there are 4 pools and 5 countries in each pool.  This means that there are 20 countries in the RWC 2015.  The RWC 2015 is going to be played in England.  Twickenham Stadium will host the final RWC game.  I had to learn about 4 countries.  They are USA, Japan, Romania and England.  I had to learn about that country that tourists will want to know like currency.  

When I was done with the countries, I had to make a bookmark.  The bookmark was all about the RWC.  I had to put New Zealand underneath those 4 countries and found the different things about the 4 countries.  I have to give the bookmarks to some students at our school so they could learn some facts about the countries.

I learned a lot of facts of the RWC 2015 and the countries that are going to play in the RWC.  Since I know a lot about the RWC 2015, I will know what countries are in each pool and what 2 countries are going to verse.  

Dear Ms Parkes

25 September 2015

Dear Ms Parkes,

Thank you for helping me with my writing.  I found an improvement in my writing than last year.  Also for some suggestions to my teacher to help with my writing.

I really enjoyed writing the diamante poem because it was a new thing for me.  I also enjoyed it because we watched the videos about the snake and the Black Piranha and it helped me describe the creatures with new words.

I also understood the meaning of a simple, compound and complex sentence.  Thanks to you and my teacher, I have learned to use them to make my writing better and improve my writing.

I still will need some help adding some compound and complex sentences in my writing to improve it.  I appreciate you helping me improve my writing.

Yours Sincerely,

Samuel